What breed of cat is that? My heart is melting. I'm terribly jealous that you can play piano. I would like to learn a skill like that someday but I'm not very musical!
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The Cat that i want. 
My favorite singer.
born and raised in columbia.
i play the piano.
That's cool you play the piano, I used to play for a while too but I wasn't that good, also that cat is adorable.
ReplyDeleteThats so cool that you like Rihanna because I like her too! I also played the piano when for a little bit haha!
ReplyDeleteI always wanted to play the piano, but I never had the time to learn it. I love that you know how to play it, that's really cool!
ReplyDeleteWhat breed of cat is that? My heart is melting. I'm terribly jealous that you can play piano. I would like to learn a skill like that someday but I'm not very musical!
ReplyDeleteLove your pictures! I used to play piano too! And that cat is too cute!
ReplyDeleteNice pictures and I play the piano too. I have never seen that cat before.
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ReplyDelete• Topic sentence- could use some help. Definitely make it stronger, maybe start with a fact on cyber bullying or something to draw the reader in. You were also very repetitive with the way you started all of your beginning sentences, try to change it up a bit!
• Support- Support was very well used but you did not cite it correctly at the bottom.
• Transitions- you used the same argument to start both paragraphs and I did not see any transition.
• Quote- Quote was great!
• Grammar and spelling- Need help, there are a lot of spelling mistakes and run on sentences that could be fixed.
• Strong argument- I found good arguments but they were hidden under a lot of fluff, try to be more direct in explaining this issue.
• Compliment- Nice support!
• Suggestion- Spelling needs some work.
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