Have you ever been
cyber bullied? More than 20 percent of 11-18 year olds said they have been
victims of cyber bullying. Every
teenager who has attended school has gone through some form of bullying. These days teenagers also go through cyber
bullying. "When I was bullied in middle school, I could go home and slam
my door and forget about it for a while, Sameer Hinduja, codirector of the
Cyberbullying Research Center, told The Associated Press (AP). These kids can
be accessed around the clock through technology. There's really no escape."(
Current Events pg.4). Cyber bullying can affects different aspects of a person
life. Some people who suffer from cyber bullying can just ignore it and move on,
but other people take it heart and get really hurt. Some of the victims who
suffer from cyber bullying develop low self esteem, high stress and or anxiety;
they don’t want to go school and can become depressed. Some victims go to the lengths
of wanting to move schools and or killing themselves. Cyber bullying is a serious issue when it is
taken too far. Having been cyber bullied in the past and hearing so many stories
on the news, this is something that I feel very strong about.
My sophomore year
of high school I was a victim of cyber bullying. During school one day a boy
made a rude comment to my group of friends and me during lunch. The boy and I got
into a huge argument in the middle lunch, which was later broken up. Later that
night I went on my laptop to check Facebook and I had several notifications.
The boy and friends were writing on my Facebook wall calling me names and
making of me. I tried defending myself but it made everything worst. The made status
about me and people I don’t even know began to comment on them, making rude comments.
This continued for a few weeks. I had several classes with the boy and his
friends and they would always make rude comments about me in class and make fun
of me. I eventually learned to ignore it and the drama died down. Those few
weeks that I had to deal with the bullying were the absolute worst. Having several
classes with the bullies and seeing what they wrote about me on Facebook really
hurt my feelings. I didn’t understand how people can be so cruel. I began to
blame myself and began to think what they were saying was true. I eventually realized that these boys were
just cruel cowards and there is nothing wrong with me. Having gone through this
personally makes this topic very important to me. This helps me understand what
other people are going through and makes me want to help spread awareness.
Cyberbullying
crackdown: recent tragedies and a new survey shine a spotlight on online
bullying." Current Events, a Weekly Reader
publication 17 Oct. 2011: 4+.Opposing Viewpoints In Context. Web. 26 Mar. 2013.
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